本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-12 07:04 编辑

a danger is getting close...

scene:the crime scene investigation lab   5:20 P.M.
           in the meeting room

Danny站在能媲美飞利浦56PFL9954H液晶电视家庭影院的超大屏幕前,操作着手里的遥控面板,讲解着Zac Hanson谋杀案现场的情况......

Danny(碧绿的眸子中映出屏幕上案发现场死者的照片,随即转过头,看向在坐的伙伴们,总结):...no witnesses,but fortunately we

found a clear fingerprint there ——victim's glasses...well...that's all .those evidences we brought from the crime scene are being tested in the lab.

Adm(补充道):this case happened in yesterday mid-night.The T.O.D. is about from 10:30 p.m. to 12:00 p.m.   Basing on Sid's

post-mortem report,the C.O.D. is asphyxia.

Stella(摇摇头,一脸疑问地看向Mac):it's different from the three murder cases before? it's unnormal.

Mac(严肃地看着屏幕上的死者,破乱的衣衫下布满虐打的伤痕,因长时间缺氧而发紫的嘴唇、惨白的面容,毫无生气地躺在N.Y.某肮脏后巷的垃圾箱旁边,冷静地分析):rage,impulse...maybe Zac Hanson was special...(眼睛突然一亮)come on Danny, back to the second picture.

Danny按下“next”,屏幕上出现了另一角度拍摄的尸体图片。

Mac(指着死者被散乱的棕色头发遮挡得不太明显的左耳外廓):look! ——enlarge this part

Danny按照boss的指示熟练操作着。

Stella(仔细看着放大的照片局部,辨认了一会儿):it looks like a tattoo,and...uh...but it's not clear enough...B-R——

Adm(猜测着):the last letter may be N.

Danny(突然想起什么):maybe it is a name——(扫视了一圈在场的各位,手掌撑着会议桌)I talked to Zac's agent Grace Lee,she mentioned a secret admirer of Zac,that person signed "Bryan" in the card each time.Besides Grace Lee said she had once suspected they were lovers.But Zac had married a super model,Jessica Hepburn ,two months ago.

Stella(恍然大悟):the serial murder was started at the same time.

Mac(双手十指交叉放在会议桌上,利落地分配工作):Stella and Adm,go back to check all of the evidences of the four cases again as soon as possible.pay attention to the private letters and souvenirs.

Stella:OK.

Adm:yes sir.

Mac(把桌上的案件档案夹递给Danny):Danny,you and Flack ,go to survey the tattoo and search for the guy named Bryan.

Danny:got it.

Mac(慎重地看着大家):I repeat it again,the killer's target is some famous ,out of the box gay guys.I don't care who they are.I just know a danger is getting close to some civilian.so——if you had some relationships with the guys matching these conditions,you would be better to notice them taking care themselves recently. ——so any questions?

大家一副备战的架势,纷纷摇头。

Mac(点点头,拿起案件档案,作势要往外走):ok,dismiss.


scene:a gay bar in N.Y.   1:42 A.M.
          in the dance floor

Brian和Justin随着劲爆的舞曲摇摆,额头抵着对方相拥着大声耳语。
Brian(放纵地大笑,高声说):hey——you know sunshine,i really like the night of N.Y.  no limited,no hiding,no much fucking meaningless words,because nobody damn minds around people,just do what you wanna do.

Justin(笑着,忘情地吻住Brian,灵动的手指插入对方一如往昔般张扬却柔软的栗色发丝里):you are drunk...and you looked so ...happy,excited...why?tell me
Brian(性感地挑挑眉,赞赏地回吻着Justin):You are amazing !boy
Justin(故意压低嗓音,舔着Brian敏感的耳廓):um~~~so what's the reason of your happiness?
Brian(猛地搂紧Justin的腰,用渐渐觉醒的Dick顶着面前越发迷人的家伙,邪魅地开腔):telling you or not will totally depend on your action sunny boy.
Justin(心领神会地笑笑,拉着Brian已经松开的皮带,把对方带向Backroom):you will be die,grandpa.
Brian(幸福地抿嘴一笑,旋即挑衅地回敬):my pleasure,try it sweety.



scene:Justin's apartment

          the telephone had rang for a while.

telephone answering machine(Lindsay's voice):surprise!you are a happy new couple!haha~(Melanie's laughing)Ok,I must calm down(laughing) Melanie handled a case and got a big commission...we decide to take a vacation to N.Y.  (兴奋地大叫)certainly Gus and J.R.must be with their mothers.so——see you later—— in N.Y. boys!haha~(Melanie's voice:don't too work hard Brian!)(laughing out loud)...




scene:at a backstreet corner          2:00 A.M.

一辆停在拐角阴影下的汽车上,有人扔下个扎着口的黑色垃圾袋,之后开车扬长而去。

一只流浪狗在肮脏的后街觅食,从袋子旁边嗅了嗅,啃破了不甚结实的袋子,随即汪汪地在巷子里狂吠。

寻着N.Y.令人目眩神迷的霓虹灯光,隐约可见破了的袋口处露出一只白皙却骨节分明的手背......

TO BE CONTINUED...

T.O.D.——死亡时间
C.O.D.——死因
post-mortem report——验尸报告
asphyxia——窒息
tattoo——纹身

PS:高分通过交通法规哦!!!振奋ing!呵呵~
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  • cora

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-11 15:50 编辑

18# dancingmm
不知不觉地好像就接着前一篇【goodbye,my love】写了:s44 没来得及跟大家说明~
不过不要紧,去joyce上一篇补补课,再回来看,应该会好一点,呵呵~
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为了更好地让大家了解我剧情的发展,或许下次再更新用全中文的。呵~如何?
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学习了,只是有点看不懂

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-11 09:10 编辑

为了让大家对Justin的叔叔detective Taylor以及涉及到的他的team members有个初步印象,特意搞了两张照片,呵~~~

左 Stella   右 Mac Taylor
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恶魔连环杀手,下个目标是小J吗?
期待后续。。。。。。

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这么说Brian可能又有一阵子可以吃吃醋咯?……

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13# cora
起初对David这个人物的定位是走冷峻、干练的完美路线的,不过觉得那样好像太不可爱了,呵
个人喜欢层次丰富的人物,有缺陷才像“人”嘛~
我希望David只有在和J在一起的时候才卸下某种心理防备,表现出真实的自己(包括出糗的样子),就像我自己平时在好友面前毫不顾忌一样哦,呵~:s35
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David被刚刚喝进嘴里的咖啡呛了一口,狠命地咳嗽,涕泪纵横,平日里斯文干练的形象颠覆殆尽。

哎 真正的美人是连咳得上气不接下气,也可以好看的{:3_212:}这个大卫看来还没够班啦~

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-11 08:36 编辑

the target

scene:Justin's studio of N.Y.   10:08 A.M.

Justin's answering a phone from Tom Gil who was the chairman of the National Arts Association.

Tom Gil(欣喜、赞赏之情毫不掩饰):Mr. Taylor,you will be the next young Picasso in the near future.
Justin(礼貌又不失自信地应对着对方华而不实的辞藻,心底却并没有掀起更多的波澜):thank you for your appreciation. it will be a super power for me.

while David Brown came in ,Justin was making faces helplessly.David shook his head with a  funny laughter.

Justin(一边接着手机,一边即将爆发似的跟David比手画脚地,小声嘀咕):it has taken me almost one hour ...(对方再次盛情邀请他去参加明晚自己主持的party)...yeah,yeah,Mr. Gil,I will be there absolutely.
David从Justin身边走过,调出电脑里Justin本周的schedule,一一核实,在重要的约会下做好标记,并注明对方姓名、年龄、隶属机构、来意、性格、应注意的细节以及可从对方身上获取的各种利益......这几乎是近两年来他每日的必修课,所以很多熟识他们这对搭档的朋友都知道,Jusitn Taylor的成功,绝少不了这位金牌经纪人的功劳。

a few minutes later......

David结束了简单的手头工作,走到位于屋子一隅的休息台边,拿起咖啡壶,倒了两杯,一手拿起自己这杯浅尝一口,一手则端着另一杯向Jusitn走去。

Justin(搔搔有些凌乱的金发,对着电话):ok,see you tomorrow Mr. Gil.
David(有些同情地递过咖啡):nice coffee
Justin(接过David送上的咖啡,喝了一大口,终于爆发了,火大地):damn it!It has no doubt Brian was right.
David(咖啡杯送到嘴边,顿了一下,斜睨一眼Justin,不甚关心地开口):so——what did Brian say again.
Justin(一脸恍然大悟地重复着Brian的话):it is more difficult to send grandpa away than making him hard.
David被刚刚喝进嘴里的咖啡呛了一口,狠命地咳嗽,涕泪纵横,平日里斯文干练的形象颠覆殆尽。
David(张大嘴,久久说不出话,露出一副看到火星人的表情):... ... ... ...
Justin(不在乎地继续品尝着手中的咖啡,舔舔嘴唇,看了一眼可怜的David,戏谑的神情酷似Brian):um~~~very nice.I’ll take another one.


at the same time
scene:Justin's apartment   
Brian was connecting with Cythia,his assistant in Kinnetik ,by his blue teeth earphone.
Cythia(利落地报告完公司进来的动态,轻松地):Done...and any questions,boss?
Brian(开怀地笑笑,满意地调侃):aha~I am considering whether you will ask me for a more salary because of an excellent work.
Cythia(很默契地回嘴,故意暧昧地压低声音):if you have the ability,I will prefer to have a licentious Sunday night.
Brian(耸耸肩,很是无所谓地把话仍回给Cythia):if it is that you really want...maybe we can try it,but... are you sure Reid won't mind it?
Cythia(实在受不了Brian任何时候都放荡不羁的态度,并且了解,跟Brian斗嘴自己占不到任何便宜):Ok,please stop it Brian...I didn't mean it.that’s just a joke,you know it.
Brian(突然很认真地):yeah,I know you have wanted me for a long time.
Cythia(对老板偶尔表现出的孩子气无可奈何):Brian!——(决定放弃“抵抗”,溜之大吉,公事化的口吻)Mr. Kinney,please give my greeting to your husband...I don't think you have any other questions,so——see you.
Brian(听着耳机里传来的“嘟......”声,兀自地坏笑着,自言自语):If i couldn't handle the cooperation with the Pepsi for N.Y. department of Kinnetik,she would kill me.



scene:New York Police Department building    2:55 P.M.
            Crime Scene Investigation Lab      in Mac Taylor's office

somebody knocked at the door.
Mac(正在翻阅某个case的档案):come in.
Stella(夹着便携式电子板推门进入,神情紧急):hey Mac,that guy appeared again. (递给Mac便携式电子板)Zac Hanson ,a  gay pop star,was murdered in a club yesterday midnight.no witnesses.Danny and Adm are driving to the crime scene.
Mac(放下手中的档案夹,接过电子板看了看,习惯性地眉头深锁):a gay pop star ...in other words,the target of this serial killer is gay community.
Stella(听着Mac的分析,点头表示认同,并迅速补充):yeah,the surface evidences told us just like that,besides...three victims had been famous,successful and out of the box.they included two artists and one lawyer...that's all.
Mac(站起身来,拿过黑色长款大衣,往外走):come on ,let's check the crime scene.

TO BE CONTINUED...


PS:暴风雨即将来临哦~~~呼呼呼~~~
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  • cora

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10# jwgyg
take it easy~      本人我也是个菜鸟级“文盲”,所以写出来的都是很口语滴,基本没啥难度,坦白讲,很复杂的句子和表达我也不太会,哈哈~
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有新意,半中半洋,不过对我这样的菜鸟来说,看起来有难度

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放心吧!这笔钱我收定了!:s33

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7# L'ignorance
是我的错,L'ignorance买假发的钱我掏了~:s04
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OMG,刚进来就被一把火烧着了头发。:s03

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5# cora
尽量吧,呵,写长篇的信心尚待加强
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偶那次是憋着一次过更新1.2万字的……呵呵Joyce也来个长篇吧

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-9 21:32 编辑

3# cora
休息几天又手痒了,呵呵~
昨天晚上突然蹦出的想法——写一篇越界文,于是就写了,至于接下来怎么发展暂时还没有具体想法,坦白说这次我想写长篇,保质又是我一贯的宗旨,所以可能不会急着更新。至于cora问的会不会写悬疑,呵,我要再想想。
BTW,看了cora的1.2万字长篇哦,赞一个!:s17 向大人学习ing,呵
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本帖最后由 cora 于 2009-8-9 16:08 编辑

Joyce又连发两弹{:3_275:}
Justin有个警探叔叔?! Joyce往下写会写悬疑剧么…
cross-over文也挺好玩的,偶前几天还在想要不要把Jackson搞到Brian的Loft去刷墙壁{:3_267:}

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-15 14:01 编辑

hello,detective Taylor


scene:in front of N.Y.Police Department building   10:07 A.M.

Brian(不情愿地被Justin拉着一路走,没好气地):ho~look at this~who can tell me why the fuck I am here?
Jusitn(一路笑着,并不理会Brian的怨言,指着面前大楼骄傲地):Look!the fourth floor is the crime scene investigation lab.
Brian(不耐烦地瞟了一眼,调侃地):i prefer to look for a hot and licentious gay bar rather than stay here with the damn automobile exhaust.
Justin(无奈又好笑地):come on Brian,we put on our pants twenty minutes ago.can't you forget it just a few hours,can you?
Brian(不以为然地挑挑眉):Nature is innocent,further more it is my talent.you know it clearly honey.
Justin(知道跟Brian讨论这个话题完全没有意义,并且不得不承认他说的该死的都对,举起双手,吃瘪地):ok,ok,Brian,stop it.
Brian(也无意继续毫无建树的斗嘴):so——now if you can give me a reason about coming here?

a man walked out N.Y.Police Department building and came here.

the person(在对街挥挥手,招呼着):hey——Justin!(一边跟过往的车辆打着让行的手势,一边往这边走)
Brian(迷惑地看着一旁笑容灿烂目迎陌生人的Justin,有点吃味,不正经地开口):ohoh~sunny boy,you have a heavy taste.let me guess...maybe he's a cop.  Is he forty or fifty at least?
Jusitn(白了一眼正眨着大眼,满脸嘲弄地看着来人的Brian,凑近他耳边,反唇相讥):you know it Mr. Kinney,old men are my favorite always,just like some asshole.(手暗暗在Brian的dick上恶作剧地抓了一把)
Brian(猛然倒吸一口气):——ah——
Justin(满意地看了一眼痛得满脸通红的Brian,转过头,对已经快走到自己身边的人,张开了双臂,开心地):hey!Mac
Mac(给了Justin一个大大的拥抱,脸上带着稳重的含蓄微笑):hi~Justin.(拍拍Justin的周身)you are much stronger than a few months ago.
Justin(耸耸肩,挂着阳光般的笑容):thanks .(拉过身边一副事不关己的Brian)Mac,this is Brian.
Mac(打量了面前高大英俊的男人,干练地伸手):nice to meet you .  Justin often talked about you .
Brian(手依然插在口袋里,犹豫了一下,还是不情愿地跟Mac握了握,一脸假笑,阴阳怪气地):nice to meet you too Mac(指了指Mac别在腰间的警徽)police badge is shining.
Mac(下意识地拍拍警徽):yeah,  a  heavy  responsibility.
Justin(在一旁点头表示认同,客观地评价):you have been doing a very good job,Mac.
Brian(听着Mac“正经”的回答,嘴角止不住上扬,假意认同): aha~.(随即很认真地) would you allow me to ask one question Mac?
Mac(无所谓地):sure.
Brian(眼中闪过一抹奸计得逞般的笑意,继续着):Be honest... how old are you ?
Mac(一头雾水):excuse me?
Justin(尴尬地垂下头,低声咒骂):shit!Brian    Shut your big mouth up,ok?(泄气地抬头看着不知所谓的Mac,道歉)i'm sorry for Brian's offense uncle Mac.
Brian(瞬间僵在原地,从牙缝里蹦出两个字):uncle——Mac?
Mac(安慰地对侄子说):never mind,kid. (审视地再度看向愣在一旁的Brian)I think you made a mistake...(再次伸出手)Mac Taylor,I'm a detective.
Brian(尴尬地笑着看向别处,终于转过头看着Mac,头痛地开口):uh...uh...hello detective Taylor.


TO BE CONTINUED...


ps:"Mac Taylor" is a chief role of CSI:N.Y. He is the boss of the crime scene investigation lab of N.Y.His team has many scientists and hi-tec instruments and equipments.
  "Mac Taylor"是美剧《犯罪现场调查纽约篇》中的主要角色。他是实验室的头儿。他的团队拥有许多学家和高科技的仪器和设备。

看的美剧多了,神奇地发现很多人名都可以找到“亲缘”关系,于是就杜撰了Mac和Justin的叔侄关系,呵,这种跨界还蛮好玩的~希望大家喜欢~
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